Poetry is not something that I have never written much of. One of the great blogs I read, shared a sonnet on Thursday. I am taking the opportunity to write one myself, because I never have and it should be a unique experience. It was an interesting : first I didn’t realize how much I enjoyed rhyming. Secondly I apparently have some unresolved issues inside. I think they are resolving.
I Remember You
by Jonathan Hilton
Oh, yes I remember you,
As a deep dark mystery I sought to reveal.
I never found or discovered, what was due,
The truth about you, hurts too much to feel.
We used to talk and be together every day,
Laughing and sharing each special time.
Now you have left, and moved along your way,
The emptiness inside alone is mine
Where is the justice? Where is the Peace?
I destroy all the selfish evidence of us.
There is a thought that this will bring a release,
Nothing worked, nothings fixed, It wasn’t worth the fuss.
The dusty, empty room is inside of me,
It is as vast and as deep as the mightiest Sea.
So what did you think of my first poem? I know, but it is the first try.
Here are a couple I remember you songs to help set the mood.
Skid Row: I Remember You
Someone Like You
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Well done! I especially like the “healing” vibe. Didn’t need to videos…you set the mood well in the sonnet. (I do like the songs you chose though)
Thanks! It was fun to write. I never would have thought to do it without your guidance. Also very grateful for the comment. I looked at another of your blogs. You must write a lot!
It’s allll about fun! I DO write a lot! Maybe too much! ;D I have 5 blogs now…a children’s poetry book waiting for illustrations and scraps of paper with hen scratching! I’m a machine. I’ve been in the process of condensing everything or compartmentalizing it all now. It’s getting a bit out of hand.
*the videos (and I meant that in a good way)
I know! I can tell you like Skid Row. I just felt I had to add something else to it. maybe to hide my words a bit. Don’t worry I can read what is intended I think.
Great poem Jonathan! Love it! Doesn’t the feeling of writing to express ourselves and helping us to resolve our issues bit by bit just pure awesomeness
I know it helps me a whole lot, when I actually pick up the courage to share it of course!
Keep it up! Love to read more of your poetry
Och Jonathan it’s so utterly wonderful. Thank you for sharing!!!
Didn’t know skid row before. Such darling music.
You make me blush! I am glad you read it and liked it. Skid Row is a bit before your time I think, but still awesome!! Thank you for commenting, you are such a superstar!
Jonathan: I am a poet and enjoyed yours greatly! You did an awesome job and should write more. I think you have inspired me to post one of mine I have just finished (it has been a work in progress for some time) on my blog tonight. Be well my friend blessings!
That is great, I can’t wait to read them! I had a lot of fun writing my sonnet because I had never done it before. Thank you again for commenting on my site, I appreciate it greatly.
This is really good – heartbreaking, actually.
Thanks for reading. If that is what came across then it is absolutely true. It was about a heart break. Isn’t all art an expression of suffering of some kind? I read that somewhere. I am grateful for your comment and visit here! Love your blog, so informational and inspirational! Like Life to Forrest Gump, you never know what you are gonna get!
Keep writing – more poetry, please.
Thank you so much! That makes my day. I will definitely publish some more. Thank you for commenting.
Great!